Wednesday, September 9, 2009

[03] Job Application Letter Critique

Goh Jinghui
Block 459, #05-306
Jurong East Avenue 5
Singapore 640459

3 September 2009

Mr. Lu Cheng Yang
Personnel Department
Ministry of Education, Singapore
1 North Buona Vista Drive
Singapore 138675

Dear Mr. Lu,

Application for the Position of Secondary School Biology Teacher

I came across the Ministry of Education (MoE) website and learnt that you are currently recruiting teachers. After reading more about it on the website, I was deeply interested and would like to apply for the position of a secondary school Biology teacher.

Although I am a fresh graduate from the National University of Singapore (NUS), I have been teaching tuition since my GCE 'A' Level examinations ended. My Life Sciences degree gives me the relevant knowledge to impart to students, and I believe my constant interaction with my tuition students has allowed me to develop skills that help me to connect with youths.

I have also been partaking in voluntary work as a mentor to secondary school students referred to the Student Care Service (SCS). Being in contact with students with some social or behavioural problems has given me the chance to learn to deal with them in a way that is best for them. There, I discovered that every child responds differently to teaching methods. This awareness and flexibility will help me to successfully motivate students to learn.

The MOE programme has developed many great teachers, some of whom I'm blessed to have come in contact with. These teachers inspired me to want to be like them, and to benefit more youths through working with them.

I have attached my resume for your consideration and would deeply appreciate it if I can attend an interview with you at your convenience. Please contact me at 81239030 at any time throughout the day.

I hope to receive your reply soon. Thank you.

Yours sincerely,
Goh Jinghui

Encl.: Resume

Okay, that was my cover letter. Click here to see what MoE wants.

(Edited as of 11 September 2009.)

1 comment:

  1. I cannot find any mistakes in your english writing.

    However, to make an application letter more impressive, i believe you should list more qualities and achievements and link them to how it can make you a good teacher. Just a suggestion though.

    Keep it up.